My mario comic

Lepouvoirduflan

I's a me mario !
Hi i'm making a comic and need comment to improve !
http://lepouvoirduflan.deviantart.com/art/AMS-A-hero-goes-down-in-flames-page-1-682261317
Check it out and tell me if you love it
 
I like the plot :bowser: . One suggestion was to be work on Bowser's face and expressions because in the beginning it looks small and more flat-faced, but by like page 6 it looks a lot better so :thumbup:. If you have the ability to do so in whatever program you're using, or even in another program like Adobe Illustrator to work with vector text, I'd say one thing that would beef up the comic and complement your expressive poses would be to create more dynamic text, whether it's selectively bolding words, speech bubbles that pop out more, onomatopoeias that are more energetic, or even just a different font. Your storyboarding and scene poses are really good!
 
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