Songs I wrote :P

[Xluidi]

(This is just copied from the Xephyr Board)

Music Jam
This isn't a musical
This is a music jam
This is a carnival

This is a music jam
This is life to max
This is a car-ni-val-of-light (- means beat)

<ramdom crap> (solos, bridges, ect)

Have you heard
The scent of the wind
It gives clues of of how
To pass with time

It's like a breed
Like a wind of change
Like a new time
A new age

What a time to advance
To get your gear
Dont let them trick you
Don't just pass away

Nothing lasts forever
Except your emotions

It's like a breed
Like a wind of change
Like a new time
A new age

A new age
A new time
Don't give up
Even in life
Neither after that

The End o:

Can't Wait

Chorus 1:
I can't wait
To get myself another car
I can't wait
To stay myself in high class

Verse 2:
This high prize lady,
she showed me how his brother
survived this crisis
eating shoes with spices.

Chorus 2:
I can't wait
To get myself another car
I can't wait
To stay myself in high class

I can't wait
to get myself another Grammy
I can't wait
To say my old boss "*uck off*

<bridge>
<solos>

Chorus 3:
I can't wait
To get myself another car
I can't wait
To stay myself in high class

I can't wait
to get myself another Grammy
I can't wait
To say my old boss "*uck off*

Verse 3:
It was a rough time for all of us,
but in the end,
we passed it.

What do you think?

 

[xXmoraleXx]

Yay for someone else who writes lyrics, i shall give you a 8/10. Only because i like my songs to ryme a lot.

 

[ScarecrowPerson]

I like to write lyrics, but I can't sing them because my voice sounds like a 9-year-old's.

 

[xXmoraleXx]

I like to write lyrics, but I can't sing them because my voice sounds like a 9-year-old's.

I cant either unless its a odd singer like billy talent's frontman. I sing like him

-ontopic-
you repeat phrases to much in the song. Unless you group them together so its as if you are ment to repeat it while singing.

 

[Smiddle]

I'm no lyric expert, but I guess those are ok.

 

[xXmoraleXx]

Yah they are, i noticed that every single anonamous person on the internet posts lyrics like this but very very emo. Glad someone has a change of pace. I personally write lyrics more mainstream with catchy ness and rymes. Think the songwriters for linkin park, zebrahead, anti- flag.

Back to his lyrics, with further inspection i noticed its written like one of those sonic next gen themes that wasnt by a punk, ska, or rock band. Like silvers theme (dont quote me on that)