Guise

[Random Blue]

So, I try my hand at writing a story again. I think I've improved over my previous two stories, and I hope you guys think so too. (but you can't read my other 2 stories 'cause they're gone)

The link is here. You can sign up for any available spots here.

Updates:​

Chapter 3 up. I'm gonna stop using the bots for a while, cause Chapter 4 is gonna be in two parts!

 

[Zero777]

It's Louis'.

I signed-up as a major protagonist (Zero777).
The story is not bad.

 

[Nathan Fielder]

No, it's Louis'.

And it's good so far, especially for Userpedia.

 

[Random Blue]

Chapter 2 is up. Well, better start working on Chapter 3 now.

 

[Zero777]

Chapter 2 is up. Well, better start working on Chapter 3 now.

Fix'd

 

[Random Blue]

All right, why did it take me so long to write Chapter 3? Short chapter is short.

 

[Zero777]

Not bad, the chapter is not bad.

 

[Random Blue]

OH CRAP NECROPOSTING ME

But . . . I seriously have updated this. I've revised the first two chapters and I'm working on making the third one longer.

 

[SpinyMaster347]

are sign-ups still available?

 

[Random Blue]

Yeah they are. Just put yourself down in any open slot.

 

[Random Blue]

Okay, all revisions are done. Like I said before, Chapter 4's going to focus on YellowYoshi instead of his bots. I don't know why it was supposed to be in two parts, though.

 

[Contra(dictory)]

I wrote a Disconnected review saying how much I loved this, but now I love it even more!

And I also thought you were a guy at the time.

Uh, don't get mad at me.

 

[Random Blue]

I wrote a Disconnected review saying how much I loved this, but now I love it even more!

And I also thought you were a guy at the time.

Uh, don't get mad at me.

It's fine. Doesn't help that my avatar's a Latios . . .

 

[Contra(dictory)]

It was more that "Mastablasta" sounds fairly...male. :P

 

[Random Blue]

It was more that "Mastablasta" sounds fairly...male. :P

Ah . . . okay. There are no girls on the internet, anyway.

 

[EctoBiologist]

I can sign up or somethin'?

 

[Random Blue]

If there are open slots. I'm pretty sure there are, though.

 

[User4042]

I signed up for major villain

 

[Random Blue]

Chapter 4 is up! It only took me like, four months to put up. I really hope taking however many months as the chapter number is doesn't become a trend. That would suck. Also, that thing where I say I spend most of my time on Tumblr is true.

Somebody who signed up to appear in this fic finally appears! Miracle, right?

 

[Random Blue]

Holy shit, another update? I am churning these things out!

 

[Contra(dictory)]

oh my god
you finally updated this
these updates are awesome
and you gave me a review
I love you

 

[Contra(dictory)]

But more specifically- well, your writing always has a tendency to blow me away. Your style is rapid-fire and your dialogue is excellent- I absolutely loved the Yellow/Mastablasta interactions.

There is a minor criticism I have, though- we're not seeing much in the form of physical descriptions of the environments or of the people! I can't hit on you if I don't know what you look like.

 

[Random Blue]

Physical descriptions of Yellow and Mastablasta appeared in their introductory chapters (1 for Yellow, 2 for Mastablasta). Same goes for every character, really.

And the locations . . . yeah, all I say is "there's x here and y over there".

 

[Contra(dictory)]

Oh, my bad.

I'm not at fault for this. You're the one who waited so long to update. ;-;

With the locations, you don't have to get that descriptive...just give a bit more detail. I know you can do it.

Alright, I went back and reread the first two chapters- looks like I missed quite a few revisions from you. : P

Also, base my depiction in this off of Resolutions Tabuu, please. ^^
(when you get to that)

 

[Random Blue]

Right . . . yeah, I take way too long to update this even though the chapters are only 5 pages apiece.

And I was thinking ahead for Guise and I actually was thinking of Resolutions Tabuu (complete with Golden Fang). Crazy, huh?