User Big Brother 1: Final Two! Lily and BMB!

Re: User Big Brother 1: The First Season

Results are in.

There was no winner (yet).

It's time for Part 2 of the challenge. You will all vote upon the stories that you submitted to me, and decide which one was the WORST. I don't think I can post all of them at once, so I have the first three right here:

It all started 3 years ago on that dull and dreary day, I was 10 years old, the rain dismally pattered onto the ground, all I could smell was the chip fat from the greasy chip van on this ominous alleyway, I could hear the water dribbling onto the dull concrete floor, my clothes were damp and sticking to me like leeches and my damp, brown hair hung, and then I met Starla, I remember her as she walked by for the first time, she wore a long black robe, and as she passed the strong smell of junk food neutralised, she smelt like adventure… then through the shadows I heard a voice ‘Starla, get here now you selfish bitch!’ I held my breath, although it was raining, I felt a cold drip of sweat slide down my forehead, in fear I hid fearfully behind a brick wall, the wall was rough and each of the little concrete bumps dug into my spine, then I peeked past the wall, the girl in the robe, ripped the robe off and threw it on the floor, there stood the girl who was going to change my life, forever.

Starla looked stunning, I remember how she stood there with her wild eyes what looked like rhinestones, her hair was white blond and very long, it covered her left eye, she wore a black top and a short skirt, she must have been frozen in the icy cold rain, the shadowy girl spoke again, her voice was very cruel ‘You better watch yourself, STARLA!!!’ that name, Starla, it was unique, bright and made me think of a radiating fire, I never got to get a proper look at the shadowy girl as I was too terrified, all I could see was her silhouette, Starlow eyes glowed a tremendous pink, and almost magically, she back flipped and kicked the shadowy girl, the girl collapsed, a few moments later she stood up, she spat at Starla’s feet then ran, after she disappeared, I snuck out from behind the wall, what had I just seen it was weird, wacky and wonderful. Starla saw me then she turned ‘Hello’ she whispered her voice, was strong and unique, I plucked up the courage and replied ‘how... do you do that’ I stammered, Starla smiled such a warm smile that it made the dreary, icy rain seem like a sunny day ‘magic.’ She replied, that was all she said as Starla walked off I chased after her ‘Miss Starla, you must be lonely, can I be your friend.’ Starla smiled that stunningly warm smile once again; I took it as a yes.

Well me and Starla became friends, we met up every day, I was 10, she was 13, we would sometimes sit in the radiating sunlight while nibbling sausage rolls, and other days, the wind was an icy demon, if that was the case we would sit indoors and sip comforting, warm coffee, it was like a fairy-tale, that was about to go oh so horribly wrong.

It was Friday the 13th of February when it all went wrong, I was walking with Starla, the weather was ominously mild, too mild, and almost un-atmospheric, there was no radiating sun, nor icy wind, not even any cold drooling rain, it all went wrong when I stepped out into the road, I wasn’t looking properly, then the car appeared the blinding lights flashed into my eyes, then I screamed, it all happened very quickly after that point.

Starla charged into me like a raged bull, I fell onto the pavement, but only one of us could be saved, the driver of this beastly car continued driving, almost intentionally, and then.. Then… Starla fell, she had be hit by the car, a few minutes later medics arrived, the driver had got away, but the thing that wonders me from the day the disaster happened was, what happened to Starla, after the white clad medics dropped Starla in one of the uncomfortable hospital beds and wheeled her into the ugly Florissant van, I never heard any more, I never knew whether she lived, nor died, almost like when those hospital van doors closed, it was like Starla had closed the doors on me.
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A cloud of gray was coming upon the great sea, Link was sad about losing his horse epona whom he loved.

He became angry and would steal vases from shops, he was never the same again

And on that day he couldnt live anymore all he could think about was epona his horse.
It was epona's funereal many people came and comoftered him, he cried very much at epona's funereal.

But as the years went by Link forgot about epona and lived a new life
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The young man was almost trapped. He'd have to fight his attacker. He quickly pivoted around and snapped a punch into the jaw, but his opponent had anticipated this. He dodged and, with his brute force, knocked the lad onto the cold, hard pavement. The young fellow tried to get up, but he was hit with blow after blow. He couldn't take any more. His eyes slowly began to close…

Dave gasped and shot straight up. He zipped out the door and over to the blue house down the street. He banged on the door, yelling, "JOHN! JOHN!" He had to warn his friend.

John wondered why whoever was whacking the door was so impatient. He grabbed the handle and slowly pulled the door open. "Dave! What's wrong?"

Gasping, Dave told him, "John, you're in danger."
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Re: User Big Brother 1: The First Season

Next set:

Pie the magnificent

Out in the desert Pie Merro, a pharoh god, was sitting on his throne when one of his slaves came in and said there was a problem on building the pyramid.

"Sir, one of the bricks isn't golden! We need your help to see what's wrong." The slave said.

He seemed frantic, so I got up from my throne and went out to see what was wrong. Usually, i have the slaves figure it out but I was just sitting so I had to get my legs working.

When I got out there I saw the silver block right away.

"There it is master," The slave said.

"WHO DID THIS!!!" I yelled with the top of my lungs.

All of them were quiet suddenly and I knew I had to get that brick out of there. It was pretty tight in there so yelled a slave to come over here and pull it out. What did I know, he didn't do anything.

"Hold on, I know a special ointment that can slip things out easy," I said and went East. "You guys find another Gold brick," I said as I was walking away.

I got to the great bush where it was said that the ointment was, and spread its leaves out carefully. Just then the ground split open and I fell through to an underworld. I knew this was a boobie trap of some sort and there were probably going to be 3 traps. This was the first. I was in a dark small room as I tried to find a door or something. I found it, and opened it slowly and peeked around the corner of the door. I saw a mummy staring at me and got freaked out but I didn't say a word. I crept to across it sight then his eyes lit up green and I started to run and find the next door. I couldn't find it and I was cornered. His legs where spread out, so I crawled through his legs fast and after I was 2 feet past him he tried to get me. I was already up and grabbed his ribs. I threw him into the door he came from and shut it quick. I heard him groan like he'd maybe come back out so I had to find it quick. I found it, but not before he got out. I opened the door but he looked the oposite way so I went out and closed it slowly. There it was, the opening of the light. I walked cautiously and I set off another boobie trap. Spikes came up all around me on the walls. I was trapped and I looked around to see if I could get out. There was a little rope in front of me so I ran and jumped to get it. I got it and pulled my self up. The spikes only clipped my foot skin and that even hurt. That was the final trap and ran up the ramp to the bush. I dug around and I found the leaf under the bush which was kind of weird. I then took it back to the pyramids winded.

"Ok, did you guys find a gold brick?" I asked out of breath.

"We did master here you go," a slave answered and gave me the brick.

I went over to the silver brick and slipped the leaf through the crevesses. When I was done I pulled the brick out easy. I placed the brick in and it fit perfectly.

"Yay master, you fixed it," and then they all cheered and went back to work and I went to my throne for a cool down with a couple of palm leaves.

That's how the pyramid was made. Without pie being so brave, the pyramids would have never been built correctly and now we praise pie as Pie The Great.
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Darkness has never came so unexpectedly. Eruptions flowed across the peaceful lands, carrying hell's malcious servants. Anything that stood in its way - trees, buldings, even people - were merciless murdered on spot. Soon, forests were destroyed, lakes had dried up, and civilization ceased. It wasn't until an angel from the infinite skies descended that hope and courage was brought back. She took the survivors and shielded them into her domain of the sky, far beyond the reach of hell. Using a sacred relic passed down by the gods, she sealed the demons away, back to their prison. She brought the humans back to earth, telling them to plant the seeds in her hand. Doing so, the forests revived and the water was plentiful. However, the seal of hell was not stable. Unbeknownst to them, demons were sneaking back into the real world, feeding of the sacred power the angel had left them. It was up to a lone hero - a descendent of the angel - to justify them and save the land before their events spiralled out of control once again. Little did he know that the fates of both the world and the angel's domain of the sky would lie on his shoulders
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Re: User Big Brother 1: The First Season

The Moon said:
Do we vote via PM?
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This is the one time you get to vote something in the actual thread. One quick rule: you can't vote for yourself. You know which that is.
 
Re: User Big Brother 1: The First Season

So the worst one? Hmm..... I guess I 'll say this one:

The young man was almost trapped. He'd have to fight his attacker. He quickly pivoted around and snapped a punch into the jaw, but his opponent had anticipated this. He dodged and, with his brute force, knocked the lad onto the cold, hard pavement. The young fellow tried to get up, but he was hit with blow after blow. He couldn't take any more. His eyes slowly began to close…

Dave gasped and shot straight up. He zipped out the door and over to the blue house down the street. He banged on the door, yelling, "JOHN! JOHN!" He had to warn his friend.

John wondered why whoever was whacking the door was so impatient. He grabbed the handle and slowly pulled the door open. "Dave! What's wrong?"

Gasping, Dave told him, "John, you're in danger."
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They're all good, this one was just kinda short, and needed more detail
 
Re: User Big Brother 1: The First Season

Vlad Plasmius said:
The Moon said:
Do we vote via PM?
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This is the one time you get to vote something in the actual thread. One quick rule: you can't vote for yourself. You know which that is.
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...Okay, well I don't see why I'd vote myself anyways...
 
Re: User Big Brother 1: The First Season

Yoshiwalker said:
Vlad Plasmius said:
The Moon said:
Do we vote via PM?
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This is the one time you get to vote something in the actual thread. One quick rule: you can't vote for yourself. You know which that is.
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...Okay, well I don't see why I'd vote myself anyways...
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To win.

duh
 
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oooooooooooh, I thought it was worst-one out.

EDIT: Lol I should go to the past and just make mine "This story is the worst. Kill it"
 
Re: User Big Brother 1: The First Season

Waker
Yoshiwaker said:
chose YOU this one
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A cloud of gray was coming upon the great sea, Link was sad about losing his horse epona whom he loved.

He became angry and would steal vases from shops, he was never the same again

And on that day he couldnt live anymore all he could think about was epona his horse.
It was epona's funereal many people came and comoftered him, he cried very much at epona's funereal.

But as the years went by Link forgot about epona and lived a new life
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Re: User Big Brother 1: The First Season

Vote:

A cloud of gray was coming upon the great sea, Link was sad about losing his horse epona whom he loved.

He became angry and would steal vases from shops, he was never the same again

And on that day he couldnt live anymore all he could think about was epona his horse.
It was epona's funereal many people came and comoftered him, he cried very much at epona's funereal.

But as the years went by Link forgot about epona and lived a new life
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Re: User Big Brother 1: The First Season

This is my awesome story:

Hi Pie said he was walking to his friend Cake's house. Pie and Cake were really good friends and they played on the swing set and watched this TV show called So Random and ran around and screamed in their ears. Then Cake went to go to Cakescago so Pie was very sad and kept facedesking himself until he was back. Cake came back one day and Pie was so excited but then Cake went again, and Pie continued his facedesking.
 
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Pie the magnificent

Out in the desert Pie Merro, a pharoh god, was sitting on his throne when one of his slaves came in and said there was a problem on building the pyramid.

"Sir, one of the bricks isn't golden! We need your help to see what's wrong." The slave said.

He seemed frantic, so I got up from my throne and went out to see what was wrong. Usually, i have the slaves figure it out but I was just sitting so I had to get my legs working.

When I got out there I saw the silver block right away.

"There it is master," The slave said.

"WHO DID THIS!!!" I yelled with the top of my lungs.

All of them were quiet suddenly and I knew I had to get that brick out of there. It was pretty tight in there so yelled a slave to come over here and pull it out. What did I know, he didn't do anything.

"Hold on, I know a special ointment that can slip things out easy," I said and went East. "You guys find another Gold brick," I said as I was walking away.

I got to the great bush where it was said that the ointment was, and spread its leaves out carefully. Just then the ground split open and I fell through to an underworld. I knew this was a boobie trap of some sort and there were probably going to be 3 traps. This was the first. I was in a dark small room as I tried to find a door or something. I found it, and opened it slowly and peeked around the corner of the door. I saw a mummy staring at me and got freaked out but I didn't say a word. I crept to across it sight then his eyes lit up green and I started to run and find the next door. I couldn't find it and I was cornered. His legs where spread out, so I crawled through his legs fast and after I was 2 feet past him he tried to get me. I was already up and grabbed his ribs. I threw him into the door he came from and shut it quick. I heard him groan like he'd maybe come back out so I had to find it quick. I found it, but not before he got out. I opened the door but he looked the oposite way so I went out and closed it slowly. There it was, the opening of the light. I walked cautiously and I set off another boobie trap. Spikes came up all around me on the walls. I was trapped and I looked around to see if I could get out. There was a little rope in front of me so I ran and jumped to get it. I got it and pulled my self up. The spikes only clipped my foot skin and that even hurt. That was the final trap and ran up the ramp to the bush. I dug around and I found the leaf under the bush which was kind of weird. I then took it back to the pyramids winded.

"Ok, did you guys find a gold brick?" I asked out of breath.

"We did master here you go," a slave answered and gave me the brick.

I went over to the silver brick and slipped the leaf through the crevesses. When I was done I pulled the brick out easy. I placed the brick in and it fit perfectly.

"Yay master, you fixed it," and then they all cheered and went back to work and I went to my throne for a cool down with a couple of palm leaves.

That's how the pyramid was made. Without pie being so brave, the pyramids would have never been built correctly and now we praise pie as Pie The Great.
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Re: User Big Brother 1: The First Season

SuperMario25 said:
Sorry mine was quite short
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Unh... you're really not supposed to reveal which one is yours.

And would you and Supremo mind voting?
 
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The young man was almost trapped. He'd have to fight his attacker. He quickly pivoted around and snapped a punch into the jaw, but his opponent had anticipated this. He dodged and, with his brute force, knocked the lad onto the cold, hard pavement. The young fellow tried to get up, but he was hit with blow after blow. He couldn't take any more. His eyes slowly began to close…

Dave gasped and shot straight up. He zipped out the door and over to the blue house down the street. He banged on the door, yelling, "JOHN! JOHN!" He had to warn his friend.

John wondered why whoever was whacking the door was so impatient. He grabbed the handle and slowly pulled the door open. "Dave! What's wrong?"

Gasping, Dave told him, "John, you're in danger."
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I vote this one, i just picked a random one
 
Re: User Big Brother 1: The First Season

This one but they were all good.
A cloud of gray was coming upon the great sea, Link was sad about losing his horse epona whom he loved.

He became angry and would steal vases from shops, he was never the same again

And on that day he couldnt live anymore all he could think about was epona his horse.
It was epona's funereal many people came and comoftered him, he cried very much at epona's funereal.

But as the years went by Link forgot about epona and lived a new life
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