New Super Mario
Ghirahim
I found a couple errors. First off, when someone begins to talk in dialouge, you must start a new paragraph. Some of those were jammed into a separate paragraph. To skip a line, type,
, on the line being skipped. For example,
New Super Mario was walking down the street with his best buddies QuizmoManiac and Mason.
Mason said, "Hey that dude over there stole my lollipop!"
"Well we will capture him in a death grip later in the day," I said. "For now, let's jut go to the coffee shop."
Later that day.... blahdey blahdey blah.....
Also when UltraMario says, "Don't you recognized him" (or something like that) it should be recognize.
But overall I really enjoyed it.
, on the line being skipped. For example,
New Super Mario was walking down the street with his best buddies QuizmoManiac and Mason.
Mason said, "Hey that dude over there stole my lollipop!"
"Well we will capture him in a death grip later in the day," I said. "For now, let's jut go to the coffee shop."
Later that day.... blahdey blahdey blah.....
Also when UltraMario says, "Don't you recognized him" (or something like that) it should be recognize.
But overall I really enjoyed it.
