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[Zero777]

Re: The Real Life Wiki

One, you put an AK-47, which are about 2 feet long, in your pocket.

And two, you stepped on a cell phone, no bigger than your foot, and your foot spontaneously bled..... Really??

Who's Sir Buzzy... whatever, is that a non-user?

The end of Chapter 4 went by too quick and in all serious, you think these dinosaurs, basically non-humans, can walk into a store on Earth and but clothing.

 

[UltimatePetey]

Re: The Real Life Wiki

One, you put an AK-47, which are about 2 feet long in your pocket.

And two, you stepped on a cell phone, no bigger than your foot, and your foot spontaneously bled..... Really??

Yes, really.

 

[UltimatePetey]

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Also, I do those things to be funny, not to make the story not make sense completely at all.

 

[Zero777]

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IMO, it's not really funny, it's rather dumb. Oh, and Chapter 3 was a bit random and dumb also. </critiquing>

 

[UltimatePetey]

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IMO, it's not really funny, it's rather dumb. Oh, and Chapter 3 was a bit random and dumb also. </critiquing>

Ok.

Also, Chapter 5 will probably come out next weekend.

 

[Toad48]

Re: The Real Life Wiki

IMO, it's not really funny, it's rather dumb. Oh, and Chapter 3 was a bit random and dumb also. </critiquing>

Do you mean dumb in a good or bad way?

 

[UltimatePetey]

Re: The Real Life Wiki

IMO, it's not really funny, it's rather dumb. Oh, and Chapter 3 was a bit random and dumb also. </critiquing>

Do you mean dumb in a good or bad way?

IDK either bad or good. But it sounds like bad. It will get seriouser from now on, I think.

 

[Toad48]

Re: The Real Life Wiki

IMO, it's not really funny, it's rather dumb. Oh, and Chapter 3 was a bit random and dumb also. </critiquing>

Do you mean dumb in a good or bad way?

IDK either bad or good. But it sounds like bad. It will get seriouser from now on, I think.

I like it. It's the only thing I read on Userpedia and it's really good.

 

[UltimatePetey]

Re: The Real Life Wiki

IMO, it's not really funny, it's rather dumb. Oh, and Chapter 3 was a bit random and dumb also. </critiquing>

Do you mean dumb in a good or bad way?

IDK either bad or good. But it sounds like bad. It will get seriouser from now on, I think.

I like it. It's the only thing I read on Userpedia and it's really good.

Wow that means a lot. Thank you

 

[Toad48]

Re: The Real Life Wiki

IMO, it's not really funny, it's rather dumb. Oh, and Chapter 3 was a bit random and dumb also. </critiquing>

Do you mean dumb in a good or bad way?

IDK either bad or good. But it sounds like bad. It will get seriouser from now on, I think.

I like it. It's the only thing I read on Userpedia and it's really good.

Wow that means a lot. Thank you

Your welcome.

 

[New Super Mario]

Re: The Real Life Wiki

IMO, it's not really funny, it's rather dumb. Oh, and Chapter 3 was a bit random and dumb also. </critiquing>

Do you mean dumb in a good or bad way?

IDK either bad or good. But it sounds like bad. It will get seriouser from now on, I think.

I like it. It's the only thing I read on Userpedia and it's really good.

Wow that means a lot. Thank you

Your welcome.

Of course he wouldn't read his brother's story though. :P

 

[UltimatePetey]

Re: The Real Life Wiki

CHAPTER 5 HAS BEEN RELEASED!

Link: http://userpedia.adriels.com/wiki/The_Real_Life_Wiki/Chapter_5

This is very long.

 

[YoshiGo99]

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AWESOME

 

[UltimatePetey]

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AWESOME

Thanks.

 

[Mariorules25]

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Another great chapter

 

[New Super Mario]

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There you go! Great improvement from the other chapters. I give it a 10

 

[Mariorules25]

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So did i

 

[YoshiGo99]

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I AM IN IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

 

[Mariorules25]

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I AM IN IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

haha we know

 

[UltimatePetey]

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It's funny, because I had to dig through my PMs to get your character bio YoshiGo XD

 

[Dr. Javelin]

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A good chapter. More action than before, more length. My only advice this time are a few nitpicks.

1. You might not want to use numbers like "2" and "10" because they're too...informal. Use words like "two" and "ten" instead.
2. Slight grammar and spelling issues. Nothing horrendous but definitely noticeable.

That's all.

 

[UltimatePetey]

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A good chapter. More action than before, more length. My only advice this time are a few nitpicks.

1. You might not want to use numbers like "2" and "10" because they're too...informal. Use words like "two" and "ten" instead.
2. Slight grammar and spelling issues. Nothing horrendous but definitely noticeable.

That's all.

I should hire you as my editor, would you like to do that? And I'm serious, not being sarcastic. :P

 

[Dr. Javelin]

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I guess I could do that. I might be a bit busy with school but when I have time I'll be happy to edit. I'm still waiting on a Userpedia account though.

 

[UltimatePetey]

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I guess I could do that. I might be a bit busy with school but when I have time I'll be happy to edit. I'm still waiting on a Userpedia account though.

Thanks. My grammar and spelling can be a little "off" sometimes. :P I'll sent the chapter into you via PM here, and you can edit it.

 

[Dr. Javelin]

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Alrighty then.