Lily Troof: Ace Attorney (Case 2 Chapter 5 is up)

Who was your favourite character in Case 1 (Turnabout Meet Up)?

  • Lily Troof

    Votes: 2 10.0%

  • Neptune Poseidon

    Votes: 7 35.0%

  • Benjamin-Matthew Bones

    Votes: 1 5.0%

  • Judge Nabber

    Votes: 2 10.0%

  • Barry Riles

    Votes: 1 5.0%

  • Gulliver Note

    Votes: 1 5.0%

  • Fire Eevee

    Votes: 6 30.0%
  • Total voters
    20
Re: Lily Troof: Ace Attorney (I promise this will get past the teaser)

Nabber said:
Phantom L said:
Anyway I got a 'not bad' from Nabber
*Faints in happiness*
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oh god what kind of reputation have I built up
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the same as smasher's?
 
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FireEevee said:
Nabber said:
Phantom L said:
Anyway I got a 'not bad' from Nabber
*Faints in happiness*
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oh god what kind of reputation have I built up
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the same as smasher's?
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Smasher isn't known for being a tough critic on stories.
 
Re: Lily Troof: Ace Attorney (I promise this will get past the teaser)

I was worried you would say
THIS STORY IS UNNACEPTABLE!
 
Re: Lily Troof: Ace Attorney (I promise this will get past the teaser)

Pretty much finished the chapter, will give it a final read and upload it tommorow.
 
Re: Lily Troof: Ace Attorney (I promise this will get past the teaser)

Sorry its a bit bleh, but chapter one is up. Next up: The courtroom guns start blazing in chapter two. I hope you guys are enjoying it so far, even though it is a bit slow.

http://userpedia.adriels.com/wiki/Lily_Troof:_Ace_Attorney-_Turnabout_Meet_Up:_Chapter_1
 
Re: Lily Troof: Ace Attorney (I promise this will get past the teaser)

Wow. I'm starting to feel a bit like Nabber for a second. :O

Anyways, I don't know if it's British grammar but when a character is speaking you should put "and" instead of 'and'.

Also you used commas where there shouldn't be commas like in the last paragraph when BMB said "One last thing. Is Gulliver Note, the prosecuter?" there shouldn't be a comma.
Then again, I don't really know British grammar so disregard that if it is.

Other than that it's really good! :)

7.9/10
 
Re: Lily Troof: Ace Attorney (I promise this will get past the teaser)

Pokémon Trainer Rin Kagamine said:
Wow. I'm starting to feel a bit like Nabber for a second. :O

Anyways, I don't know if it's British grammar but when a character is speaking you should put "and" instead of 'and'.

Also you used commas where there shouldn't be commas like in the last paragraph when BMB said "One last thing. Is Gulliver Note, the prosecuter?" there shouldn't be a comma.
Then again, I don't really know British grammar so disregard that if it is.

Other than that it's really good! :)

7.9/10
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also it's prosecutor not prosecuter.
 
Re: Lily Troof: Ace Attorney (I promise this will get past the teaser)

My spelling sucks and I hate word for not picking it up ;-;.
EDIT: I spelt it as Prosecutor so Rin must have done that when quoting innocorrectly.
 
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Phantom L said:
My spelling sucks and I hate word for not picking it up ;-;.
EDIT: I spelt it as Prosecutor so Rin must have done that when quoting innocorrectly.
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You also put Chapter 1 before the first sentence. It's in the title so I don't see why it's needed


Otherwise it's great
 
Re: Lily Troof: Ace Attorney (I promise this will get past the teaser)

I just put it there for the hell of it.
thank you guys.
 
Re: Lily Troof: Ace Attorney (I promise this will get past the teaser)

I like it so far. Keep up the good work!
 
Re: Lily Troof: Ace Attorney (I promise this will get past the teaser)

Phantom L said:
My spelling sucks and I hate word for not picking it up ;-;.
EDIT: I spelt it as Prosecutor so Rin must have done that when quoting innocorrectly.
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Yup. My spelling even worse
 
Re: Lily Troof: Ace Attorney (I promise this will get past the teaser)

Not bad. Better than a lot of stuff on userpedia.
This is just random, but can my character have black eyes instead?
 
Re: Lily Troof: Ace Attorney (I promise this will get past the teaser)

Got the time to finally edit the prologue.

You're welcome.
 
Re: Lily Troof: Ace Attorney (I promise this will get past the teaser)

Thank you.
Also working on Chapter two. Warning you know that it will be pretty speech heavy.
 
Re: Lily Troof: Ace Attorney (I promise this will get past the teaser)

I GAVE IT TOO LOW A RATING!

Anyways, I did. What I meant to say is

9.999999999/10
 
Re: Lily Troof: Ace Attorney (I promise this will get past the teaser)

Pokémon Trainer Rin Kagamine said:
I GAVE IT TOO LOW A RATING!

Anyways, I did. What I meant to say is

9.999999999/10
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You rate everything 9.9[...]


seriously
 
Re: Lily Troof: Ace Attorney (I promise this will get past the teaser)

Because just about everything I read is good, but there's usually a flaw or too.


It's a habit.
 
Re: Lily Troof: Ace Attorney (I promise this will get past the teaser)

Pokémon Trainer Rin Kagamine said:
Because just about everything I read is good, but there's usually a flaw or too.


It's a habit.
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Rate Twilight. I dare you.
 
Re: Lily Troof: Ace Attorney (I promise this will get past the teaser)

Pokémon Trainer Rin Kagamine said:
Because just about everything I read is good, but there's usually a flaw or too.


It's a habit.
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No, it's you having incredibly low standards.
 
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