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Re: The Real Life Wiki

Who voted zero? :shifty:
 
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(IMO remember) I thought Chapter 5 was poorly done. I find it a nice idea to have the backstory on how he got the stone, but I think it failed. And to think that a magical stone from another world is all of a sudden guarded by a pharaoh who isn't necessarily described as being undead, actually it's the opposite.
 
Re: The Real Life Wiki

Ok the main problems of these story are as follow:

1-Supermo gets promoted for bureaucrat for "his great edits". This is HIGHLY unlikely. I mean, if he was promoted to a patroller first, I guess I could accept that. But bureaucrat?

2-Yoshidude wants to kill the heroes because they don't recognize him (?) But I guess he's insane or something.

3-There is a device that warps the users into real life or something, it doesn't want to warp them back for no reason whatsoever and you have to recover 6 stones in real life to do so...basically inserting real life into Users-related fanfiction is always a terrible idea.
 
Re: The Real Life Wiki

Kizuna Kagesaki said:
(IMO remember) I thought Chapter 5 was poorly done. I find it a nice idea to have the backstory on how he got the stone, but I think it failed. And to think that a magical stone from another world is all of a sudden guarded by a pharaoh who isn't necessarily described as being undead, actually it's the opposite.
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It didn't even say he was a pharaoh, so your last statement is incorrect.
 
Re: The Real Life Wiki

carcinoGeneticist said:
Here is a review of the prologue. I didn't write it, but the actual author wants to remain anonymous so I'm posting it for them.

“Supremo's point of view
It all started when I got promoted.
Porplemontage went to the Administrative Council's Office, and all of the patrollers, administrators, and bureaucrats discussed if I should be come a sysop, or even a bureaucrat.
"I've seen his work around the wiki," Porplemontage said. "He is a very exceptional user with great edits. Although he is not the sharpest on wiki-syntax, he could get something he would be good at."
"However, if he does not have good wiki-syntax, what can he do to improve the wiki? Promoting people is a serious matter, Porplemontage," Super Mario Bros. asked.
"I just said: we can find something for him to do. Just look at his user contributions: wonderful. He deserves to be promoted." Porplemontage replied.”

The main character, who is actually the author’s edits are “wonderful” and he’s getting promoted. Hmmm, I wonder if this is an AUTHOR SELF-PROMOTION X2 COMBO? And “If I should be come?” How can he spell “bureaucrat” when he can’t spell “become”? “Administrative Council’s Office”? Why not Sysop Palace or Tower or SOMETHING LESS NORMAL. I also doubt “He can get good at things” is a valid reason for promotion. And he wouldn’t get promoted to Sysop or ‘Crat just for “Good edits”, as he’d probably become a patroller for that, in some instances. Also, how does Supremo know EXACTLY what they said?

“Almost everyone agreed it was the right decision, which led Porplemontage to come to me.
Porplemontage walked over to me while I was editing.
"Supremo, we need to talk,". Porplemontage said to me.
"Yes Steve?," I asked.
"Almost everyone on the Administrative Council agreed you were a great user, and you deserve to be promoted. Not only will you be a sysop, you will become a bureaucrat. I'm very proud of how you improved. So, I am going to walk you over to the Promotion Room, where you can get your suit and where you will be promoted. Come with me, please." Porplemontage said to me.
We walked forever to get to the Promotion Room. Porplemontage took out his keys in his pocket to unlock the door.
"Well, go ahead and stand under the Promotionizer and get your bureaucrat suit!" Porplemontage told me.”

Supremo’s point of view
I’ll have to give myself a PRRRRROMOTION.
Seriously? Promotion room? Promotion suit? Promotionizer?! That sounds like the most stupid thing in the world. And seriously? Straight to bureaucrat? Everyone agreed? Even Gamefreak? And I’m sure Porple has better ways to waste his time. Like wearing underwear, or whatever he does.

“I was so excited. I was finally going to get promoted.
I stepped under the Promotionizer with my bureaucrat suit. Porplemontage set the settings to "bureaucrat", and stepped back to let the machine to its work.
It took about 5 seconds. And after I stepped out, I was proud of myself.
"Well, you just got promoted! Don't just sit there! Go editing!" Porplemontage yelled.
I fast-walked back to the editing area, and edited as a new bureaucrat.”

Promotionizer...did Billy Mays advertise that, bychance? Porplemontage also seems very pushy. Inspiring Supremo to spend the rest of his life editing. And when you’re a new ‘Crat, you should go check the admin board! The Userpedia one is fun, at least! “Go editing!”? Is that sentence even grammatically and/or politically correct?!



“I was a bureaucrat for 3 straight years. After creating an article, Porplemontage came up to me.
"Supremo, you've been a great bureaucrat for 3 straight years now, and I am going on a short vacation to a beach in California. I trust you enough for you to take care of the wiki, which is why I am going to promote you to Steward," Porplemontage told me.”

Why did he have to say he was a bureaucrat for three straight years twice? I mean, yes, Porple says it the second time, but Supremo writes it. Also, why do they need a steward for that short amount of time? It’s not like there’s much he can do if something goes wrong that other staff can’t do. Also California?! The main point of the story is about users getting sent to the real world, and Steve is going there himself? So does real life coexist alongside the Wiki, and is the Wiki still just a website? Then how are they walking around inside it? So is Steve trapping himself in the real world? And again, author self-promotion.

“We walked to the promotion room again and did the same process, but this time, I got a set of keys to edit certain pages.
"I want you to take good care of this wiki, Supremo. I don't want to see you turn out like Wayoshi." Porplemontage said that to me, and just left.
I announced I was the new Steward for a couple of days, and everyone was happy.”

First, the author obviously doesn’t know much about Wayoshi. Wayoshi pretended to be other people in chats, and then threatened to blow up the Wiki but didn’t. He didn’t really abuse ‘Crat powers, let alone Steward powers. “Everyone was happy” is kind of an unnecessary line. And I’m pretty sure the certain pages wouldn’t need editing in just a couple of days.

“However, one of the keys was the keys to the Secret Room.”

That’s not a page!



“I walked around and found the door. I pulled out my keys and opened it.
I saw a strange device in the far left corner. It said "Turn anything into real life!".
I picked it up. One of the switches was "Wiki".”

Why would Porplemontage need a machine like that? And why wasn’t Wiki the only switch, considering they are in the Wiki. And why would Porple need a sign on that. He should know what it does. And should blow it up because, judging by where he went, it’s completely pointless.

“"Should I do this?" I asked myself aloud.
"No no, don't do this. Porplemontage trusted you to take care of the wiki. You will mess everything up."
"But it sounds really cool!"
"But you could mess up the wiki!"
I couldn't figure out what I should do. But after awhile, I decided I would use it.”

Is he talking to himself? Or is that the different sides of his brain? It seems the side telling him to do it is very dumb. He knows it’ll mess up the whole Wiki, but “it sounds cool”. That’s like saying destroying the Wiki is cool. And they gave him ‘Crat powers?

““I set the device on the "Wiki" switch, and turned it on.
"Ha! What a joke! I can't belie----"
I was cut off by a loud noise all over the wiki.
"AAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!" I yelled, and all I saw was black.”

Why. Did. They. Make. Him. The. Steward.

Also, why does that do something? Porplemontage obviously had a real life, so why does that do something so drastic?! Not so happy now, are you, users?

The story, so far, is rather bland and there are many problems with what is happening. Porplemontage seems to be wearing his underwear on his head, and stuck two pencils up his nose. Supremo is giving himself a lot of self-promotions, but, judging by the switch scene, hasn’t really matured too much. And they made him a ‘Crat three years before that. It’s also rather short. So, I’d give this a 5/10, and that’s really pushing it.
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damn that is a very long review it's a little late
 
Re: The Real Life Wiki

carcinoGeneticist said:
Here is a review of the prologue. I didn't write it, but the actual author wants to remain anonymous so I'm posting it for them.

“Supremo's point of view
It all started when I got promoted.
Porplemontage went to the Administrative Council's Office, and all of the patrollers, administrators, and bureaucrats discussed if I should be come a sysop, or even a bureaucrat.
"I've seen his work around the wiki," Porplemontage said. "He is a very exceptional user with great edits. Although he is not the sharpest on wiki-syntax, he could get something he would be good at."
"However, if he does not have good wiki-syntax, what can he do to improve the wiki? Promoting people is a serious matter, Porplemontage," Super Mario Bros. asked.
"I just said: we can find something for him to do. Just look at his user contributions: wonderful. He deserves to be promoted." Porplemontage replied.”

The main character, who is actually the author’s edits are “wonderful” and he’s getting promoted. Hmmm, I wonder if this is an AUTHOR SELF-PROMOTION X2 COMBO? And “If I should be come?” How can he spell “bureaucrat” when he can’t spell “become”? “Administrative Council’s Office”? Why not Sysop Palace or Tower or SOMETHING LESS NORMAL. I also doubt “He can get good at things” is a valid reason for promotion. And he wouldn’t get promoted to Sysop or ‘Crat just for “Good edits”, as he’d probably become a patroller for that, in some instances. Also, how does Supremo know EXACTLY what they said?

“Almost everyone agreed it was the right decision, which led Porplemontage to come to me.
Porplemontage walked over to me while I was editing.
"Supremo, we need to talk,". Porplemontage said to me.
"Yes Steve?," I asked.
"Almost everyone on the Administrative Council agreed you were a great user, and you deserve to be promoted. Not only will you be a sysop, you will become a bureaucrat. I'm very proud of how you improved. So, I am going to walk you over to the Promotion Room, where you can get your suit and where you will be promoted. Come with me, please." Porplemontage said to me.
We walked forever to get to the Promotion Room. Porplemontage took out his keys in his pocket to unlock the door.
"Well, go ahead and stand under the Promotionizer and get your bureaucrat suit!" Porplemontage told me.”

Supremo’s point of view
I’ll have to give myself a PRRRRROMOTION.
Seriously? Promotion room? Promotion suit? Promotionizer?! That sounds like the most stupid thing in the world. And seriously? Straight to bureaucrat? Everyone agreed? Even Gamefreak? And I’m sure Porple has better ways to waste his time. Like wearing underwear, or whatever he does.

“I was so excited. I was finally going to get promoted.
I stepped under the Promotionizer with my bureaucrat suit. Porplemontage set the settings to "bureaucrat", and stepped back to let the machine to its work.
It took about 5 seconds. And after I stepped out, I was proud of myself.
"Well, you just got promoted! Don't just sit there! Go editing!" Porplemontage yelled.
I fast-walked back to the editing area, and edited as a new bureaucrat.”

Promotionizer...did Billy Mays advertise that, bychance? Porplemontage also seems very pushy. Inspiring Supremo to spend the rest of his life editing. And when you’re a new ‘Crat, you should go check the admin board! The Userpedia one is fun, at least! “Go editing!”? Is that sentence even grammatically and/or politically correct?!



“I was a bureaucrat for 3 straight years. After creating an article, Porplemontage came up to me.
"Supremo, you've been a great bureaucrat for 3 straight years now, and I am going on a short vacation to a beach in California. I trust you enough for you to take care of the wiki, which is why I am going to promote you to Steward," Porplemontage told me.”

Why did he have to say he was a bureaucrat for three straight years twice? I mean, yes, Porple says it the second time, but Supremo writes it. Also, why do they need a steward for that short amount of time? It’s not like there’s much he can do if something goes wrong that other staff can’t do. Also California?! The main point of the story is about users getting sent to the real world, and Steve is going there himself? So does real life coexist alongside the Wiki, and is the Wiki still just a website? Then how are they walking around inside it? So is Steve trapping himself in the real world? And again, author self-promotion.

“We walked to the promotion room again and did the same process, but this time, I got a set of keys to edit certain pages.
"I want you to take good care of this wiki, Supremo. I don't want to see you turn out like Wayoshi." Porplemontage said that to me, and just left.
I announced I was the new Steward for a couple of days, and everyone was happy.”

First, the author obviously doesn’t know much about Wayoshi. Wayoshi pretended to be other people in chats, and then threatened to blow up the Wiki but didn’t. He didn’t really abuse ‘Crat powers, let alone Steward powers. “Everyone was happy” is kind of an unnecessary line. And I’m pretty sure the certain pages wouldn’t need editing in just a couple of days.

“However, one of the keys was the keys to the Secret Room.”

That’s not a page!



“I walked around and found the door. I pulled out my keys and opened it.
I saw a strange device in the far left corner. It said "Turn anything into real life!".
I picked it up. One of the switches was "Wiki".”

Why would Porplemontage need a machine like that? And why wasn’t Wiki the only switch, considering they are in the Wiki. And why would Porple need a sign on that. He should know what it does. And should blow it up because, judging by where he went, it’s completely pointless.

“"Should I do this?" I asked myself aloud.
"No no, don't do this. Porplemontage trusted you to take care of the wiki. You will mess everything up."
"But it sounds really cool!"
"But you could mess up the wiki!"
I couldn't figure out what I should do. But after awhile, I decided I would use it.”

Is he talking to himself? Or is that the different sides of his brain? It seems the side telling him to do it is very dumb. He knows it’ll mess up the whole Wiki, but “it sounds cool”. That’s like saying destroying the Wiki is cool. And they gave him ‘Crat powers?

““I set the device on the "Wiki" switch, and turned it on.
"Ha! What a joke! I can't belie----"
I was cut off by a loud noise all over the wiki.
"AAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!" I yelled, and all I saw was black.”

Why. Did. They. Make. Him. The. Steward.

Also, why does that do something? Porplemontage obviously had a real life, so why does that do something so drastic?! Not so happy now, are you, users?

The story, so far, is rather bland and there are many problems with what is happening. Porplemontage seems to be wearing his underwear on his head, and stuck two pencils up his nose. Supremo is giving himself a lot of self-promotions, but, judging by the switch scene, hasn’t really matured too much. And they made him a ‘Crat three years before that. It’s also rather short. So, I’d give this a 5/10, and that’s really pushing it.
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Ah, more talk about me getting promoted.

I don't know how many times I've said this, but that was just to get the story off.

And when was this written, 2257?
 
Re: The Real Life Wiki

Ok I'll just make a story about waffles invading the MarioWiki and Steve promoting Toucan Sam to defeat them. BUT! He and his friends must gather 5 celebrities (Justin Beiber, Mily Cyrruss, Paper Jorge, Tim Curry and Weird Al). If anyone asks, I'll just say that was just to get the story off.

In all seriousness that was a pretty weak excuse.
 
Re: The Real Life Wiki

arsenicCatnip said:
Ok I'll just make a story about waffles invading the MarioWiki and Steve promoting Toucan Sam to defeat them. BUT! He and his friends must gather 5 celebrities (Justin Beiber, Mily Cyrruss, Paper Jorge, Tim Curry and Weird Al). If anyone asks, I'll just say that was just to get the story off.

In all seriousness that was a pretty weak excuse.
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Anyway, I'm not going to be promoted for long anyway, so all of you stop your complaining about it.
 
Re: The Real Life Wiki

arsenicCatnip said:
Just put this in your head. When you make a fanfiction, expect compliments AND criticism. I'm just telling you what the main problems of the story are in my opinion.

twinArmageddons said:
arsenicCatnip said:
Toucan Sam
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Mason? :P
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Maaaaaaaybe....
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No, I'm not mad at you for criticizing.
 
Re: The Real Life Wiki

grimAuxiliatrix said:
Kizuna Kagesaki said:
(IMO remember) I thought Chapter 5 was poorly done. I find it a nice idea to have the backstory on how he got the stone, but I think it failed. And to think that a magical stone from another world is all of a sudden guarded by a pharaoh who isn't necessarily described as being undead, actually it's the opposite.
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It didn't even say he was a pharaoh, so your last statement is incorrect.
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king + Egypt = Pharaoh
 
Re: The Real Life Wiki

Kizuna Kagesaki said:
grimAuxiliatrix said:
Kizuna Kagesaki said:
(IMO remember) I thought Chapter 5 was poorly done. I find it a nice idea to have the backstory on how he got the stone, but I think it failed. And to think that a magical stone from another world is all of a sudden guarded by a pharaoh who isn't necessarily described as being undead, actually it's the opposite.
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It didn't even say he was a pharaoh, so your last statement is incorrect.
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king + Egypt = Pharaoh
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Brother Kizuna Kagesaki has a point Brother grimAuxiliatrix
 
Re: The Real Life Wiki

Brother Love said:
Kizuna Kagesaki said:
grimAuxiliatrix said:
Kizuna Kagesaki said:
(IMO remember) I thought Chapter 5 was poorly done. I find it a nice idea to have the backstory on how he got the stone, but I think it failed. And to think that a magical stone from another world is all of a sudden guarded by a pharaoh who isn't necessarily described as being undead, actually it's the opposite.
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It didn't even say he was a pharaoh, so your last statement is incorrect.
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king + Egypt = Pharaoh
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Brother Kizuna Kagesaki has a point Brother grimAuxiliatrix
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Oh brother...
 
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