Can someone help me ?

Dr Luigi Tm said:
Yipee! Thanks again! And now, is there anything wrong in this?:

Unlike previous Mario role-playing games, Bowser does not have any lines of dialogue at all in Paper Mario: Sticker Star.
That's just fine.
 
Insert the word "in" after "unlike," and then it will be just fine.
 
Okay! Thank you! And now, do you see something wrong in this?:

The Thunder Cloud item seen in Mario Kart Wii first appeared in Mario Kart Arcade GP.
 
That sentence is correct.
 
Hey it's me again! Thanks again for your help!

I would like to know if there is something wrong with this sentence?:

In the Super Mario All-Stars remake of SMB2(USA), red Bezzos became yellow while the gray and green Beezos became red.

Thanks!
 
Dr Luigi Tm said:
Hey it's me again! Thanks again for your help!

I would like to know if there is something wrong with this sentence?:

In the Super Mario All-Stars remake of SMB2(USA), red Bezzos became yellow while the gray and green Beezos became red.

Thanks!
You should put a space before the "(" and you should change Bezzos to Beezos
 
Oh yeah! I did not see that! Thanks!

I have another one here:

During the ending cutscene of Mario Super Sluggers, when Wario and Waluigi are falling of the sky, the "Γ" in Waluigi's cap is mirrored.

Is there anything wrong in that?
 
Some corrections for the sentence:

During the ending cutscene of Mario Super Sluggers, when Wario and Waluigi are falling from the sky, the "Γ" on Waluigi's cap is horizontally flipped.

I'd usually write cutscene as "cut-scene" with a hyphen, but either is correct. Speaking of that glitch, I find it really strange. I wonder how the developers made a mistake like that (for all we know, it may have been intentional). Here's a pic if someone wants to know what we're talking about.

WaluigiGlitch-MSS.png
 
In the ending cutscene of Mario Super Sluggers, when Wario and Waluigi are falling from the sky, the Γ on Waluigi's cap is horizontally flipped.

Thanks! Unfortunately, this sentence is 4 characters too long for Twitter. (144/140) Do you think there is a word meaning ''horizontally flipped or do you see something else I can cut?
 
Instead of "horizontally flipped", maybe just use "mirrored" like in your original sentence. Both work fine
 
Hehe! Thanks a lot!

Now, I' not sur which word should I use for this:

In the Super Mario All-Stars remake of Super Mario Bros. 3, three coins were added in (to?) World 2-2.
 
I'd use "to". Also perhaps put the word "extra" before "coins" so it would look like this:

In the Super Mario All-Stars remake of Super Mario Bros. 3, three extra coins were added to World 2-2.
 
Thanks Virtua Dino!

Now, for this one, is it possible to put an 's' on 'ones'? Is this sentence right?:

The European version of Mario Golf 64 has a different intro theme than the American and Japanese ones.
 
Dr Luigi Tm said:
Thanks Virtua Dino!

Now, for this one, is it possible to put an 's' on 'ones'? Is this sentence right?:

The European version of Mario Golf 64 has a different intro theme than the American and Japanese ones.
Are the opening themes different in the American and Japanese ones? If not, leave it out
 
Thaks al!

And now, I would like to know if this sentence all right or if there is something wrong in it?:

In Mario Kart Wii, SNES Mario Circuit 3 and N64 DK's Jungle Parkway are the only two courses in which it is impossible to do tricks on.
 
Dr Luigi Tm said:
Thaks al!

And now, I would like to know if this sentence all right or if there is something wrong in it?:

In Mario Kart Wii, SNES Mario Circuit 3 and N64 DK's Jungle Parkway are the only two courses in which it is impossible to do tricks on.
That's fine
 
Cool! Thanks! And which version of these sentences do you prefer?:

A) The street outside of the office of Nintendo's distributor in Sweden was renamed "Marios gata".

B) The street in which the Sweden office of Nintendo's distributor is located was renamed "Marios gata".


And is the anything wrong in this:

In Super Mario World, the green block with a white star on it (Bonus Block) gives the player a 1-up if 30 coins were collected in the level.
 
Thanks! and would you say :

A) In Super Mario World, the green block with a white star on it (Bonus Block) gives the player a 1-up if 30 coins were collected in the level.

B) In Super Mario World, the green block with a white star on it (Bonus Block) gives the player a 1-up if 30 coins have been collected in the level.

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Thanks! And can someone tell me ifthis sentence is all right?:

Oddly, in bonus rooms of Super Mario World, if the player hits a block on the left side with the cape, it will always be a "O".
 
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