Suicide League (Superhero fan story) Cancelled

Do you think i should start writing this again

  • Yes

    Votes: 5 62.5%

  • No

    Votes: 1 12.5%

  • I don't care

    Votes: 2 25.0%
  • Total voters
    8
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Re: Suicide League (Superhero fan story) fourth chapter has been released

Okay, now I care that TPY is dead.

Anyway, this greatly helped with characterization, and I think it'll do you a world of good in the future.
 
Re: Suicide League (Superhero fan story) fourth chapter has been released

Thank you
 
Re: Suicide League (Superhero fan story) first Who's who has been released

Pyro's info is misplaced in UM's info. Other than that, it's not bad.
 
Re: Suicide League (Superhero fan story) first Who's who has been released

Fixed
 
Re: Suicide League (Superhero fan story) first Who's who has been released

Review:

The chapter was quick and informative; it did well in its job, I don't think there much to say beyond that although I didn't fully understand the first part. It's not the most fleshed-out description I have read but it's descriptive good enough level. The chapter overall was not bad at all.

4.1/5

P.s.: You also forgot to capitalize names of cities.
 
Re: Suicide League (Superhero fan story) first Who's who has been released

I thought Uniju's and TPY's were the best done. I didn't exactly see how UM's past led to him talking like a caveman though. I would have liked for that to have been more fleshed out. Also, if you did this for the Bowserpedia Guild, it'd probably help there too.
 
Re: Suicide League (Superhero fan story) first Who's who has been released

Well, I really don't think that you should have to break the fourth wall like this. Can't you just explain this in-story?
 
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Discord said:
Well, I really don't think that you should have to break the fourth wall like this. Can't you just explain this in-story?
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That's part of the charm of the story.
 
Re: Suicide League (Superhero fan story) first Who's who has been released

Maybe it's just me but I have not been getting that charm...
 
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Magus said:
I thought Uniju's and TPY's were the best done. I didn't exactly see how UM's past led to him talking like a caveman though. I would have liked for that to have been more fleshed out. Also, if you did this for the Bowserpedia Guild, it'd probably help there too.
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UM talks like a caveman because the mushroom downgraded his brain. And i plan to make more of these
 
Re: Suicide League (Superhero fan story) first Who's who has been released

Don't Fear said:
Racism against Moblins.

I fucking lol'd.
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racism against moblins isnt funny Mr. Fear
(Other than that what did you think)
 
Re: Suicide League (Superhero fan story) first Who's who has been released

Racism is a terrible thing, but when that showed up I just had to laugh. Good job, good job.

My criticisms remain the same, but I really enjoyed the chapter. You should've put it before you killed off TPY, though.
 
Re: Suicide League (Superhero fan story) first Who's who has been released

I realized that i shouldn't have killed TPY DAMN YOU HINDSIGHT
 
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Lips said:
I realized that i shouldn't have killed TPY DAMN YOU HINDSIGHT
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No, I killed TPY.

Heh heh heh heh heh...
 
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Dr. Javelin said:
Lips said:
I realized that i shouldn't have killed TPY DAMN YOU HINDSIGHT
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No, I killed TPY.

Heh heh heh heh heh...
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i shall have revenge jack
 
Re: Suicide League (Superhero fan story) first Who's who has been released

By the way im turning you into a evil Kangaroo
 
Re: Suicide League (Superhero fan story) first Who's who has been released

Dr. Javelin said:
Silly Jack Characters of the day don't come back
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Nice way to contradict yourself.
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silly jack its not a contradiction for jack noir and Dr. Jackaroo are not the same people
 
Re: Suicide League (Superhero fan story) first Who's who has been released

Great.

So now am I going to appear as twinArmageddons or Dr. Javelin?
 
Re: Suicide League (Superhero fan story) first Who's who has been released

Well there both Dr. Javelin
 
Re: Suicide League (Superhero fan story) first Who's who has been released

Little did they know that I was the one controlling Jack...
 
Re: Suicide League (Superhero fan story) first Who's who has been released

Nope
 
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Lips said:
Well there both Dr. Javelin
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Well so is Jack Noir so I was trying to figure our if your story had any continuity.
 
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